Friday, February 13, 2009

Mimic of "Bear in There" by Shel Silverstein


"Skunk In a Trunk" by Diane Edwards

There’s a skunk
In our old trunk –
He likes it ‘cause it’s full of junk.
With his tail on a whale
And his back on a jack
And his black and white fur
Inside a backpack,
He’s covered with paper clips,
He’s under the rocks,
He’s climbing through photos,
He’s found my lost sock.
And he lets out a stink
If the lid lifts a wink.
And it lets out a funk
Like hundred year old gunk–
That skunk
In our old trunk.

Original - "Bear in There" by Shel Silverstein

There's a Polar Bear
In our Frigidaire--
He likes it 'cause it's cold in there.
With his seat in the meat
And his face in the fish
And his big hairy paws
In the buttery dish,
He's nibbling the noodles,
He's munching the rice,
He's slurping the soda,
He's licking the ice.
And he lets out a roar
If you open the door.
And it gives me a scare
To know he's in there--
That Polary Bear
In our Fridgitydaire.

2 comments:

  1. I like how the repetition makes a great rhythm in your poem "He's covered" "He's under" "He's climbing" "He's found" ... very fun read.

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  2. Diane,
    I have always loved Shell Silverstein's poems, but I enjoyed reading your mimic poem of the skunk even more! I loved that you described him by saying, "And his black and white fur Inside a backpack!" I think kids would enjoy picturing a skunk in this way, and would have fun coming up with their own mimic poem similar to this.

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